The school, Ella Risk School, is a very interesting school. It is not in the top percentage of the state, but it is not the lowest either. Throughout this essay, I will explain all about Ella Risk School, Central Falls community, and the district of Central Falls. There are many positives about this community, but also some negatives. I will show you that despite some questionable academic scores, the school fosters an environment where students teachers and parents all work together. AUDIENCE? OVERVIEW OF REPORT?
Ella Risk School has a student to teacher ratio of 1:11. According to students who took the statewide SALT test (Society for Applied Learning Technology) OR SCHOOL ACCOUNTABILITY FOR LEARNING AND TEACHING , the children in Ella Risk School have a lower percentage of health than the state of Rhode Island. The students at Ella Risk School are more open with their teachers when it came to personal issues, but when it came to academics, students were less likely to talk to their teachers than other schools in Rhode Island. In the SALT survey, Ella Risk School was lower percentage-wise than the state of Rhode Island when it came to getting along with teachers, being robbed in school, and the amount of times students were offered drugs. SHOULD PROVIDE COMPARISON NUMBERS IN ()'S. The results did shower (SIC) that the children from Central Falls were bullied and teased more by other children than the states average. (School Reports, Infoworks.ride.uri.edu, 2007) WHAT IS THE MAIN TOPIC OF THIS PARAGRAPH?
As of right now, Ella Risk School has a pretty good parental involvement rate. It had a pretty dramatic change in percentage between the 2003-2006 school years. In the 2003-2004 school year, the parental involvement rate was steadily above the average for Rhode Island, with about 65% (CITAITON) . Then, in the 2004-2005 school year, the rate dropped dramatically to an astonishing 37%. The next school year, 2005-2006, the parental involvement spiked back up to a steady 61%. Compared to the 90% of Rhode Island parents who think that the community supports the schools, only 82% of the parents in Central Falls think that their community supports the school district. (CITATION?)
The school is ethnically and culturally diverse because it has a 64% Hispanic population, 16% African American, 1% Native American, and 19% white race in Ella Risk. In the district of Central Falls, there is a 24 percentage of ESL (English as a Second Language) in the school. Compared to the other schools in this district, Ella Risk School averaged about 19.5 suspensions per 100 students. Other elementary schools in this district averaged about 11.9, and the states low average was a shocking 4.1. (School Reports, Infoworks.ride.uri.edu, 2007) WHY DID YOU INCLUDE DIVERSITY DATA WITH SUSPENSION DATA? ARE THEY RELATED?
The No Child Left Behind report card for Ella Risk is unsatisfactory. This school only met 22 out of the 29 evaluated targets. Only 49.1% of all residents in Central Falls graduated high school. THIS SENTENCE IS ABOUT THE COMMUNITY, PREVIOUS ONE WAS ABOUT SCHOOL. When looking on the school website, there were no extra curricular activities for this elementary school. (School Reports, Infoworks.ride.uri.edu, 2007) DO YOU BELIEVE THAT?
Out of all of the families, 64% speak another language, and 21% live with their mothers only. The population is made up of 57.2% white, .6% Native American, .7% Asian, .3% are Native Hawaiian, and 28.4% are another race. The median age of the town of Central Falls is 30 years old, out of a population of 18,928 people. Only 5.7% of the community has a bachelor’s degree or higher. IS THIS LOW OR HIGH? (CITATION?)
The community of Central Falls is mostly made up of small houses with 3 to 4 units, or 5 rooms ARE UNITS ROOMS?. Most households have to share one car between the whole family, and the average family has a median income of $22,628. This is quite low compared to the states average, which is $50,046. GOOD COMPARISON. DON'T START SENTENCE WITH NUMBER: 25.9% of all families in Central Falls are under the poverty income level. This community, in both studies (500+ population and 5000+ population) for Rhode Island most violent cities, was third on both lists in 2001. Others on this list included Cranston, and the two most violent cities: Providence and Newport. (American Fact Finder, 2007)
Ella Risk School has about $8,200 PER CHILD? in state funding FUNDING COMES FROM STATE? . This is considerably low compared to the average state funding which is around $9,550. On each student, the district spends on expenditures such as tuition, transportation, and other benefits, about $1,222. DOES THIS MAKE SENSE? All together the state spends about $4,582,193 on all students. (American Fact Finder, 2007)
Central Falls has buses that transport the students to and from school each day. (American Fact Finder, 2007) The parents are allowed to bring their children in before school starts, but it is frowned upon because school does not open until 8:15, and the school playground is unsupervised CITATION?. There are no teachers who are there to watch the children play on the playground, and there are no before school or after school programs to keep the children entertained or out of trouble. (Central Falls School District, 2007)
There are about 3,520 students in the district of Central Falls, and about 5,041 kids enrolled in all grades from nursery school to grad school. 3,160 people in Central Falls graduated with a high school degree while 3,003 students did not complete high school. There are 113 students in the vocational classes (American Fact Finder, 2007), which “prepares learners for careers that are based in manual or practical activities, traditionally non-academic and totally related to a specific trade or occupation” (Wikipedia, 2007). The district funds $1,328 for the students and classes, which is lower than the $1,823 state average fund for vocational classes. The number of students receiving special education support programs, whether it is in a public school, home schooled, hospitalized kids, and students educated in separate schools is 957. (American Fact Finder, 2007)
To graduate from high school, students must complete all 4 years of high school. They must complete 3 full-credits of science, and 4 full-credits of English and math. They must also have full-credits in language arts and other random credits, such as a language. The teaching qualifications are as followed: They need a Certificate of Eligibility for Employment (CEE), Bachelor's Degree from an accredited or an approved institution of higher education, and a graduate of an approved program for the preparation of elementary school teachers, and a professional certificate. (Certificate Requirements, 2007)
All in all, Ella Risk School is behind other elementary schools in their district, and are not meeting the standards for the No Child Left Behind reports. Ella Risk School is in need of some improvement with their school. There are no extra curricular activities for the children to do, or an after school program. There is mostly a younger crowd that runs through Central Falls, with an average age of 30. Children tend to be bullied more and has a high suspension rate. There are mostly negatives about this district but on the plus side, the parental involvement of the Central Falls district is above Rhode Island's average, and the students have a pretty good relationship with their teachers. Central Falls would be a dangerous place to live, but a livable in if you could not afford to live somewhere else.
Evaluation / Feedback for EDC 102 Context Statement
Total Score for this Evaluation: 30 /35 pts
REVISION FEEDBACK:
- IMPROVED INTRO
- ADDED INFORMATION IN SECTIONS.
- STILL OMITTED SECTION HEADINGS.
- IMPROVED THE NUMBER OF FACTS CITED, SOME CITATIONS STILL FAULTY.
- CONCLUSION UNCHANGED.
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Rubric
Introduction = 5 / 5 pts.
5 - Intro provides an overview of the upcoming analysis, including what school/district/community is being analyzed, what aspects are being analyzed, and who the report is intended to inform.
4 - Intro names the school/district/community and previews the scope of the report, but does not describe who the report is intended to inform.
3 - Intro names the school/district/community but not much else.
2 - Intro fails to name the school, district, and community.
0 - No introduction section is apparent.
Constructive comments about report's introduction:
Organization = 4/ 5 pts.
5 - Report includes an Introduction, a Conclusion, and sections for the School, District, and Community. Within each section, paragraphs logically group the information presented.
4 - Report includes all of the sections mentioned previously, but does not break down information into paragraphs within each section.
3 - Report is missing one of the sections.
2 - Report is missing more than one section.
0 - Report does not include any sections.
SECTIONS ARE NOT LABELED, ORGANIZATION OF REPORT IS UNCLEAR.
Mechanics = 4 / 5 pts.
5 - All information in the report is cited using APA styled- citations after the information and in a Reference section at the end of the report.
and
There are extremely few typos and misspelled words in the report.
4 - Most information is cited using APA style.
and/or
There are a noticeable number of typos or misspellings.
3 - Some citations in the References section are not in APA style, e.g. URLs are listed without the title of the website.
and/or
There are many typos, misspellings, or other writing errors.
2 - Most of the report's information is not cited, or APA style was not used.
0 - Report does not include a Reference section.
Conclusion = 4 / 5 pts.
5 - Conclusion reviews analysis of school, district and community and describes why findings should be important to reader.
4 - Conclusion reviews analysis of school, district and community.
3 - Conclusion does not refer back to report findings.
0 - No conclusion section is apparent.
Strengths and constructive comments about conclusion:
Creativity =5 / 5 pts.
5 - Report is written in an engaging style.
4 - Report has some interesting sections.
3 - Report generally reports information without seemingly without purpose.
Strengths and constructive comments about presentation:
Thoroughness = 8 /10 pts
5 - Report includes at least ten different facts in each section (school, community, district) and
compares each figure with another relevant figure (e.g. state or national average) and
states whether or not the school is meeting NCLB standards.
4 - Report includes at least eight different facts in each section and
compares most figures with relevant values and
states whether or not the school is meeting NCLB standards.
3 - Report includes at least six different facts in each section and
compares some of the figures to other relevant figures
2 - Report includes at least four different facts in each section and
compares some of the figures to other relevant figures.
0 - Report includes less than four different facts for any section or
fails to compare any figures with other relevant figures.
Strengths and constructive comments about information contained in report:
The Community, District, and School of Ella Risk.
The school, Ella Risk School, is a very interesting school. It is not in the top percentage of the state, but it is not the lowest either. Throughout this essay, I will explain all about Ella Risk School, Central Falls community, and the district of Central Falls. There are many positives about this community, but also some negatives. I will show you that despite some questionable academic scores, the school fosters an environment where students teachers and parents all work together. AUDIENCE? OVERVIEW OF REPORT?
Ella Risk School has a student to teacher ratio of 1:11. According to students who took the statewide SALT test (Society for Applied Learning Technology) OR SCHOOL ACCOUNTABILITY FOR LEARNING AND TEACHING , the children in Ella Risk School have a lower percentage of health than the state of Rhode Island. The students at Ella Risk School are more open with their teachers when it came to personal issues, but when it came to academics, students were less likely to talk to their teachers than other schools in Rhode Island. In the SALT survey, Ella Risk School was lower percentage-wise than the state of Rhode Island when it came to getting along with teachers, being robbed in school, and the amount of times students were offered drugs. SHOULD PROVIDE COMPARISON NUMBERS IN ()'S. The results did shower (SIC) that the children from Central Falls were bullied and teased more by other children than the states average. (School Reports, Infoworks.ride.uri.edu, 2007) WHAT IS THE MAIN TOPIC OF THIS PARAGRAPH?
As of right now, Ella Risk School has a pretty good parental involvement rate. It had a pretty dramatic change in percentage between the 2003-2006 school years. In the 2003-2004 school year, the parental involvement rate was steadily above the average for Rhode Island, with about 65% (CITAITON) . Then, in the 2004-2005 school year, the rate dropped dramatically to an astonishing 37%. The next school year, 2005-2006, the parental involvement spiked back up to a steady 61%. Compared to the 90% of Rhode Island parents who think that the community supports the schools, only 82% of the parents in Central Falls think that their community supports the school district. (CITATION?)
The school is ethnically and culturally diverse because it has a 64% Hispanic population, 16% African American, 1% Native American, and 19% white race in Ella Risk. In the district of Central Falls, there is a 24 percentage of ESL (English as a Second Language) in the school. Compared to the other schools in this district, Ella Risk School averaged about 19.5 suspensions per 100 students. Other elementary schools in this district averaged about 11.9, and the states low average was a shocking 4.1. (School Reports, Infoworks.ride.uri.edu, 2007) WHY DID YOU INCLUDE DIVERSITY DATA WITH SUSPENSION DATA? ARE THEY RELATED?
The No Child Left Behind report card for Ella Risk is unsatisfactory. This school only met 22 out of the 29 evaluated targets. Only 49.1% of all residents in Central Falls graduated high school. THIS SENTENCE IS ABOUT THE COMMUNITY, PREVIOUS ONE WAS ABOUT SCHOOL. When looking on the school website, there were no extra curricular activities for this elementary school. (School Reports, Infoworks.ride.uri.edu, 2007) DO YOU BELIEVE THAT?
Out of all of the families, 64% speak another language, and 21% live with their mothers only. The population is made up of 57.2% white, .6% Native American, .7% Asian, .3% are Native Hawaiian, and 28.4% are another race. The median age of the town of Central Falls is 30 years old, out of a population of 18,928 people. Only 5.7% of the community has a bachelor’s degree or higher. IS THIS LOW OR HIGH? (CITATION?)
The community of Central Falls is mostly made up of small houses with 3 to 4 units, or 5 rooms ARE UNITS ROOMS?. Most households have to share one car between the whole family, and the average family has a median income of $22,628. This is quite low compared to the states average, which is $50,046. GOOD COMPARISON. DON'T START SENTENCE WITH NUMBER: 25.9% of all families in Central Falls are under the poverty income level. This community, in both studies (500+ population and 5000+ population) for Rhode Island most violent cities, was third on both lists in 2001. Others on this list included Cranston, and the two most violent cities: Providence and Newport. (American Fact Finder, 2007)
Ella Risk School has about $8,200 PER CHILD? in state funding FUNDING COMES FROM STATE? . This is considerably low compared to the average state funding which is around $9,550. On each student, the district spends on expenditures such as tuition, transportation, and other benefits, about $1,222. DOES THIS MAKE SENSE? All together the state spends about $4,582,193 on all students. (American Fact Finder, 2007)
Central Falls has buses that transport the students to and from school each day. (American Fact Finder, 2007) The parents are allowed to bring their children in before school starts, but it is frowned upon because school does not open until 8:15, and the school playground is unsupervised CITATION?. There are no teachers who are there to watch the children play on the playground, and there are no before school or after school programs to keep the children entertained or out of trouble. (Central Falls School District, 2007)
There are about 3,520 students in the district of Central Falls, and about 5,041 kids enrolled in all grades from nursery school to grad school. 3,160 people in Central Falls graduated with a high school degree while 3,003 students did not complete high school. There are 113 students in the vocational classes (American Fact Finder, 2007), which “prepares learners for careers that are based in manual or practical activities, traditionally non-academic and totally related to a specific trade or occupation” (Wikipedia, 2007). The district funds $1,328 for the students and classes, which is lower than the $1,823 state average fund for vocational classes. The number of students receiving special education support programs, whether it is in a public school, home schooled, hospitalized kids, and students educated in separate schools is 957. (American Fact Finder, 2007)
To graduate from high school, students must complete all 4 years of high school. They must complete 3 full-credits of science, and 4 full-credits of English and math. They must also have full-credits in language arts and other random credits, such as a language. The teaching qualifications are as followed: They need a Certificate of Eligibility for Employment (CEE), Bachelor's Degree from an accredited or an approved institution of higher education, and a graduate of an approved program for the preparation of elementary school teachers, and a professional certificate. (Certificate Requirements, 2007)
All in all, Ella Risk School is behind other elementary schools in their district, and are not meeting the standards for the No Child Left Behind reports. Ella Risk School is in need of some improvement with their school. There are no extra curricular activities for the children to do, or an after school program. There is mostly a younger crowd that runs through Central Falls, with an average age of 30. Children tend to be bullied more and has a high suspension rate. There are mostly negatives about this district but on the plus side, the parental involvement of the Central Falls district is above Rhode Island's average, and the students have a pretty good relationship with their teachers. Central Falls would be a dangerous place to live, but a livable in if you could not afford to live somewhere else.
References:
"Certificate Requirements." Rhode Island Department of Elementary and Secondary Education. 9 Oct 2007 <http://www.ridoe.net/EducatorQuality/Certification/Certreqs.aspx>.
"Home." Central Falls School District. 9 Oct 2007 <http://www.cfschools.net/schools/ri/webpage/index.htm>.
"Information Works: Rhode Island Public Schools 2007 : District Reports." Information Works: Rhode Island Public Schools 2007. 9 Oct 2007 <http://infoworks.ride.uri.edu/2007/queries/FindDist.asp?District=04>.
"Information Works: Rhode Island Public Schools 2007 : School Reports." Information Works: Rhode Island Public Schools 2007. 9 Oct 2007 <http://infoworks.ride.uri.edu/2007/queries/FindSch.asp?ID=04101>.
"Rhode Island - Fact Sheet - American FactFinder." American FactFinder. 9 Oct 2007 http://factfinder.census.gov.
"Rhode Island 2001 Violent Crime Rate." IDcide - Local Information Data Server. 9 Oct 2007 <http://www.idcide.com/lists/ri/on-population-2001-violent-crime-rate.htm>.
Subject. "Vocational education - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia." Main Page - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia. 17 Oct 2007 <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vocational_education>
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Evaluation / Feedback for EDC 102 Context Statement
Total Score for this Evaluation: 30 /35 pts
REVISION FEEDBACK:
- IMPROVED INTRO
- ADDED INFORMATION IN SECTIONS.
- STILL OMITTED SECTION HEADINGS.
- IMPROVED THE NUMBER OF FACTS CITED, SOME CITATIONS STILL FAULTY.
- CONCLUSION UNCHANGED.
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Rubric
Introduction = 5 / 5 pts.
Organization = 4/ 5 pts.
Mechanics = 4 / 5 pts.
and
There are extremely few typos and misspelled words in the report.
and/or
There are a noticeable number of typos or misspellings.
and/or
There are many typos, misspellings, or other writing errors.
Conclusion = 4 / 5 pts.
Creativity =5 / 5 pts.
Thoroughness = 8 /10 pts
compares each figure with another relevant figure (e.g. state or national average) and
states whether or not the school is meeting NCLB standards.
compares most figures with relevant values and
states whether or not the school is meeting NCLB standards.
compares some of the figures to other relevant figures
compares some of the figures to other relevant figures.
fails to compare any figures with other relevant figures.